精通英语的帮我批改下我的作文2
My ambition
My ambition is to be a businessman.First, as a businessman,
I must study hard so that I am able to pass entrance examination for good university. After that,I will found a company. Not only I should be very diligent,but also find a good idea to develop my company.For example, I need talented person to join my company to create new thing together.Take it to be selled by market. then I will get money, so I can open the second
company.By this way. At last I will be a rich man.
参考答案:完全是 chinglish ……
其他的语法不说了，最起码的 talented person 冠词都没有
哎…… 没法下笔改啊