帮忙看看我这段英文有没有什么错误的地方
First of all, my hobbies are always different with the other girls. I don’t like to play the games as the other girls do. Secondly, I like technological games. I think CS is much more interesting than common computer games. Thirdly, and also the most important one is that I learnt to cooperate with partners as well.
大概意思讲:第一,我的爱好总是不同于其他女生。我不喜欢玩那些女生喜欢玩的游戏。第二,我喜欢技术性的游戏。我认为CS比那些普通的电脑游戏更好玩。第三,也是最重要的一点,我从中也学会了与人合作。
参考答案:different with改为 different from
as the other girls do 去掉 the
I like technological games改为I prefer the games with more skill requirement(仅供参考,个人意见)
去掉最后的as well ,我认为没有必要表达“‘也’这个意思”