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我续写了一篇英语文章,由于水平不高,请求帮忙改一改!!谢谢了!The Little man续写The little man felt very hurt. He sat on a bunch and cry. Just then an old man with long bread walks in front of him. The old man said: “My little man, why are you crying so sad? Can I help you?” The little man said: “Why all the people call me little man? I don’t like this name. I want to be a tall and strong man!” “But you are little indeed.” The old man said. “I had high heels and tall hat. Why do they still call me little man?” the little man answered. “Come with me, and I’ll tell you the reason.” The old man breathed something in the little man’s ear. And the little man understands. He takes the old man’s advice.He will do more exercises and eat fresh fruit and vegetables. He will sleep a lot, too. After five month…… One day morning, he got up very early, and looked himself in the mirror. He can’t believe his eye: he is now strong, tall and a little bit handsome. He rubs his eyes again and again. He shouted: “Aha! I’m tall and strong now, no one can call ma a little man, and I think they will call me a strong man!” And then he went out. He walked past the shoe shop. The shoemaker was very surprises, and said: “Oh! My god! My little man, you are tall now. The man is a little bit sad because the shoemaker still calls him “little man” But he is also very happy. He is tall and strong now. He doesn’t believe one hears.
参考答案:overall, it's a not bad passage.
well done!
有些细节问题需要注意
1.故事整体时态混乱，过去时与现在时交替，注意保持时态的一致性，建议用现在时较为生动形象。
2.胡子拼错了，应该是 beard
3.Why all the people call me little man?
all the people 该为 everyone 较好
little man 应该为 a little man
4.Why do they still call me little man?
little man 应该为 a little man
5.breathed something in the little man’s ear
in 改为 into 较生动
6.He will do more exercises and eat fresh fruit and vegetables. He will sleep a lot, too.
will 改为 start to do 较好
7.believe his eye
eye 改为 eyes
8.and I think they will call me a strong man!
think 改为 bet 较生动
9.结尾有些乱
用 although 句型强调后半部分较好些